Magnolia blossom danced to the rhythm of my heartbeat as they fell gently to the moist forest floor—it is spring. I watched in admiration as my secret lover’s long flowing dress swept over the petals, meticulously repositioning each one. The time is now—time for our love to bloom. There is one problem though—she won’t even look into my eyes. Sometimes she comes on to me so strong but retreats as soon as I try to hold her hands. I desperately want to kiss her, but she’s too shy and unpredictable. Her uncertain mood makes it difficult getting to know her.
She gets so angry when it rains, doing things out of her character. I wish she would give me a chance to profess my love to her. But she is too scared and prefers hiding. The only time I’ve ever seen her in a jovial mood, unbothered and relaxed, was the day we met on the enchanted beach hidden in the middle of the forest. She played courageously with the monstrous waves, while whistling a unique melody, long enough to hear the beauty of it, but short enough to keep you wanting more.
Maybe one day she’ll let me get close to her, stop hiding, and love me unconditionally. I’ll take her on romantic dates—long walks on the beach. Of course, touching is permitted on our first date—touch me everywhere. It’s nothing she hasn’t done before—after all, she is the wind.
© Jenoy Merchant and merchantwritesagain.wordpress.com, 2018
Certainly a good read, I must say it was short, but that’s the point of short stories lol. I do look forward to reading your upcoming posts. 👍😀👍
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Thanks, Shawn. Stay tuned for future updates.
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I love your signature endings
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Thanks Darius.
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Good piece bro. I was anxious to see where it leads. It was short and spicy. Loved it.
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I like the way how anxious I was to know how it was going to end. Of course it was a shocker. I love it.
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Suspense is a great element, grabs your attention and takes you on a journey. I’m glad you liked it! Stay tuned for future updates.
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The ending was unexpected. That within itself is a great element of the short story. I loved it
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I’m glad you enjoyed. Stay tuned, more to come.
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“Of course touching is permitted” arrogance I love it bro!
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Glad you enjoyed it! Stay tuned for future updates.
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Very intense and mysterious. Great writing as always Jenoy.
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Thanks, Lori. More to come stay tuned.
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You got me 😅! Great ending, Jenoy!!
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I like the words you use to describe things cause they give you like a really vivid image. And it’s a very relatable situation that I’m sure most people have gone through/are going through.
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Thanks for your insight, I’m glad you enjoy the read.
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Aaayyy! Love it 💙
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Stay tuned for more. I’m happy you enjoyed the read.
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The ending actually made me smile. Great work and great ending of course. Cheers.
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Thank you!
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The story was great and I loved the ending , great peice and it was the perfect length!
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Thank you. I am glad you liked it. Stay tuned for subsequent updates.
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Love it !
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Thank you!
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The general tone of the narrative and the ending were deeply satisfying and surprising at the same time! Hats off!
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Thank you. I am glad you enjoyed it.
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I really love the detail in every aspect of the story. Keep writing more! ☺️
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Thank you! I will keep writing, stay tuned.
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A great short story!! Looking forward to your upcoming posts!!
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Thank you, stay tuned. I update every Saturday at 9am EST.
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This is beautiful
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Thank you!
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The way you describe your love for her makes me fall for her (a bit) too ! It’s a nice, beautiful story. Looking forward for update 🙂
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Thank you! I have a new update every Saturday at 9am EST, stay tuned
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The whole time i was thinking: is she the one afraid or are you? I was rooting for you to make a move! I kept reading anxiously and then, ahh *quick short breath*
BEAUTIFUL – I went back to read it again 🙂
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Thank you! I am happy you enjoyed reading. I like mysteriousness. Which one of us do you think is too shy to make the first move? I’d say myself, the wind is only shy sometimes.
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You do it very well. Of course you ha ha! No worries we all tend to get “blown away” by love. Looking forward to more reads 🙂
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I love the way you write so beautiful! Thank you!
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Thank you! Stay tuned for future updates.
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I’ve just come from the First Friday post but I just had to reiterate here that your blog is absolutely stunning! i love your header image and the wood panelling in the background! Your posts are also really beautifully written! Keep it up! 🙂
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Thank you, that means a lot! I hope you’ll equally enjoy my subsequent updates.
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Any time! Hope to see you around my blog too sometime 🙂
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Beautifully expressed ☺️
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Thank you!
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Wow, such beautiful and lovely writing.
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Thank you! I appreciate you taking the time to read. I’m glad you liked it!
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You surprised me with the ending. I’m never surprised. Excellent piece, very enjoyable read.
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Thank you. That means a lot. I must have done something right. Hope to see you around.
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I will definitely be back.
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I will see you around for sure. I update every Saturday at 9am EST, stay tuned.
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I followed you.
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Love the ending! 🙂
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Thank you!
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Wow, this was amazing! You have amazing skills😍
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Thank you. I am humbled by your kind thoughts.
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This was a lovely read 🙂
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Thank you, I’m glad you enjoyed it.
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Feel free to browse around and let me know what you think.
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Reblogged this on David Snape and Friends – The place to show off your hidden talents.
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Thank you David, I really appreciate it!
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That’s alright 🙂
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Just discovered your blog! It was a fun read, short and sweet!:)
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Thank you! I am glad you enjoyed reading.
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Wonderful !
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Thank you, Nash! I hope you will enjoy my subsequent work. Feel free to browse around and let me know what you think.
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I’m really honest.So beautiful,so fantastic,like parts of best sold book Harry Potter.I want to steal your act only don’t know how 😉 .
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Very nice. 🙂
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Thank you, what was your favorite part?
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“I watched in admiration as my secret lover’s long flowing dress swept over the petals, meticulously repositioning each one.”
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Interestingly, that’s one of my favorite lines also. After re-reading I thought, that’s not a bad line you got there (I dialogue with my work sometimes). Haha. Thanks again for taking the time to read and sharing your insight.
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Wow beautiful 🌸🌸🌸🖤🖤🖤
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Thank you!
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Oh, great story and most intriguing. I love the appearance of your blog as it definitely compliments your excellent posts.
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Thank you! I am glad you enjoyed my work.
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😉
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Hello! You write very well! I love the ending and the poem’s sensuality. I could actually picture it all in my head! Thank you!
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Thanks for your genuine feedback.
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Full of suspense, I was here reading mesmerizing as I read along lol. Wasn’t boring, short and spicy. This really grabs my attention. I love the ending. Ms Coombs would be so proud of you. Keep it up.
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Thanks for taking the time to read. I am happy you enjoyed it.
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I loved,loved (yeah twice) it!! The personification of wind in such an alluring way caught me off guard😁 Mostly the monstrous power of wind is told,so the subtleness worked really well for me.. All my best wishes!!
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Thanks again for your thoughtful insight, it means a lot. Glad you enjoyed it!
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Beautiful piece! Keep up the good work!
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Thank you, Andwayne.
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Good read..quite descriptive..
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Thank you, Mel. I’m glad you enjoyed it.
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Good Read, it left me wanting more, I’m thoroughly impressed. Great job.
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Thank you R. Miller, feel free to browse around the blog and appease your yearning.
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It was short and spicy.It was also very inferential and the ending surprised me.That was a good story.
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Thank you, Sherece!
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Beautifully written👌
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Thank you! I think you’ll enjoy my other post as well, go ahead and give them a read and let me know what you think.
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I’m getting addicted to your style of punch-climax short-stories! Half-way through the piece I pause and wonder what the twist would be, yet my curiosity trumps my patience and jumps through the words to get to the ending. I would happily read a whole big book filled with such one page stories and finish it in one go!
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read. i am glad that you find my writing style intriguing. Maybe one day i will publish a book and have personal copy sent to you. Thanks again, I hope to keep enthralling your imagination with my work.
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In eager await to receive that copy as soon as feasible;)
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Still on my quest to reading all of your short stories but by far my favorite! Your endings always go out with a bang. Great read Jenoy, very thoughtfully written!
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Thanks, Anthony!
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